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Maggieverse story about a noble girl who learns cynicism and cruelty

The maggieverse has heard hints from elsewhere about what Abrogail likes and would like to present the following:

A novel with "psychological horror" warnings on it but nonetheless genre-tagged for romance, about a girl who grows up in a monarchist, feudal-adjacent dystopia where personal relationships are overshadowed by personal gain and everyone has to keep an eye out for backstabbing at all times; while carefully balancing her legal obligations to her parents and teachers with the extra-obligatory factors that will prevent them from discarding her before she's gotten everything she needs out of them, the young noble girl at the center of the story yearns for genuine affection and care such as she had once received from a nanny who was executed for crimes it had been convenient to her parents to frame her for when she was very young. At a social event, she is briefly distracted from checking various refreshments for poisons or mind-altering drugs by a handsome young nobleman with a charming smile, who over the course of the next in-universe weeks takes an interest in her without making clear any ulterior motives and slowly seducing her into trusting him. After she has fallen thoroughly into his clutches, he proceeds to betray her in the most viciously pragmatic way possible, stripping her of several opportunities she had spent years cultivating at the behest and payment of her rivals. A brief window into his perspective shows that he thinks of her as pathetic and almost hopelessly naive, but that there's a chance she'll take the event as the reality check it is and shape up into someone it would be dangerous to overlook and with a quite central grudge against him, so he's preparing to order some token security measures against her when, mid-sentence, his perspective cuts off.

A reframe back to the protagonist's viewpoint shows her as having picked up the pieces of her shattered psyche quite effectively, if not perhaps in what a normal person would call the usual fashion, and having decided that the extent to which she could blame him for doing exactly the same thing anyone else would have done to her given the chance is vastly overshadowed by how skilled he was at making her feel good and happy and adored when he was trying to do that. So she has decided to kidnap him and psychologically break him into doing what she wants again, using resources that she had continued hiding from him even while she trusted him out of sheer habit. The torture scenes, both physical and mental, are lovingly described, and the boy pretends to break several times before it actually happens, only to be caught out by clever tests the protagonist devises.

For the rest of the book, the protagonist's rise through the ranks of the kingdom is steady, even though she starts out lower than she would have if she had never fallen for the boy's original betrayal, and although her rivals initially deride her for spending so many resources on acquiring her pet, it turns out that having a consistent source of extremely basic emotional needs strengthens her considerably psychologically, giving her the edge she needs to triumph over several crucial rivals. At the end of the book she has acquired a position of direct service to the king, who is so impressed by her effectiveness in bending her pet's will to her own that he puts her in charge of breaking critically important dissidents.

 

...it's the sort of romance novel that Abrogail always thought she wanted to read, and Abrogail would have been much more excited about reading it before coming across the Earthtender masterpieces.  This is most well-crafted and Abrogail will be printing it throughout Cheliax and seeing if she can slip it into Taldor to corrupt their own sensibilities - it's very well-placed for that - but now it has the hollow sense of being given only exactly what you asked for, when you didn't understand what you really wanted.

Somebody put this directly after the Earthtender book exactly so that Abrogail would realize that all the romance novels she used to enjoy, even brought to the pinnacle of the art form she herself tried to create, would only be hollow things compared to what the wider universe could offer her?  And then she never gets an Earthtender book again, and has to read the two she has over and over again, or if they do send her other books they're not as good?  It's finely honed cruelty if so; especially the part where Abrogail herself wouldn't give back the Earthtender book for anything, even knowing that not even with the Crown of Infernal Majesty could she boost and force any Chelish writer to produce its equal.

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Maggieverse story about a noble girl who learns cynicism and cruelty

The maggieverse has heard hints from elsewhere about what Abrogail likes and would like to present the following:

A novel with "psychological horror" warnings on it but nonetheless genre-tagged for romance, about a girl who grows up in a monarchist, feudal-adjacent dystopia where personal relationships are overshadowed by personal gain and everyone has to keep an eye out for backstabbing at all times; while carefully balancing her legal obligations to her parents and teachers with the extra-obligatory factors that will prevent them from discarding her before she's gotten everything she needs out of them, the young noble girl at the center of the story yearns for genuine affection and care such as she had once received from a nanny who was executed for crimes it had been convenient to her parents to frame her for when she was very young. At a social event, she is briefly distracted from checking various refreshments for poisons or mind-altering drugs by a handsome young nobleman with a charming smile, who over the course of the next in-universe weeks takes an interest in her without making clear any ulterior motives and slowly seducing her into trusting him. After she has fallen thoroughly into his clutches, he proceeds to betray her in the most viciously pragmatic way possible, stripping her of several opportunities she had spent years cultivating at the behest and payment of her rivals. A brief window into his perspective shows that he thinks of her as pathetic and almost hopelessly naive, but that there's a chance she'll take the event as the reality check it is and shape up into someone it would be dangerous to overlook and with a quite central grudge against him, so he's preparing to order some token security measures against her when, mid-sentence, his perspective cuts off.

A reframe back to the protagonist's viewpoint shows her as having picked up the pieces of her shattered psyche quite effectively, if not perhaps in what a normal person would call the usual fashion, and having decided that the extent to which she could blame him for doing exactly the same thing anyone else would have done to her given the chance is vastly overshadowed by how skilled he was at making her feel good and happy and adored when he was trying to do that. So she has decided to kidnap him and psychologically break him into doing what she wants again, using resources that she had continued hiding from him even while she trusted him out of sheer habit. The torture scenes, both physical and mental, are lovingly described, and the boy pretends to break several times before it actually happens, only to be caught out by clever tests the protagonist devises.

For the rest of the book, the protagonist's rise through the ranks of the kingdom is steady, even though she starts out lower than she would have if she had never fallen for the boy's original betrayal, and although her rivals initially deride her for spending so many resources on acquiring her pet, it turns out that having a consistent source of extremely basic emotional needs strengthens her considerably psychologically, giving her the edge she needs to triumph over several crucial rivals. At the end of the book she has acquired a position of direct service to the king, who is so impressed by her effectiveness in bending her pet's will to her own that he puts her in charge of breaking critically important dissidents.

 

...it's the sort of romance novel that Abrogail always thought she wanted to read, and Abrogail would have been much more excited about reading it before coming across the Earthtender masterpieces.  This is most well-crafted and Abrogail will be printing it throughout Cheliax and seeing if she can slip it into Taldor to corrupt their own sensibilities - it's very well-placed for that - but now it has the hollow sense of being given only exactly what you asked for, when you didn't understand what you really wanted.

Somebody put this directly after the Earthtender book exactly so that Abrogail would realize that all the romance novels she used to enjoy, even brought to the pinnacle of the art form she herself tried to create, would only be hollow things compared to what the wider universe could offer her?  And then she never gets an Earthtender book again, and has to read the two she has over and over again, or if they do send her other books they're not as good?  It's finely honed cruelty if so; especially the part where Abrogail herself wouldn't give back the Earthtender book for anything, even knowing that not even with the Crown of Infernal Majesty could she boost and force any Chelish writer to produce its equal, and may never again see its like.

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Maggieverse story about a noble girl who learns cynicism and cruelty

The maggieverse has heard hints from elsewhere about what Abrogail likes and would like to present the following:

A novel with "psychological horror" warnings on it but nonetheless genre-tagged for romance, about a girl who grows up in a monarchist, feudal-adjacent dystopia where personal relationships are overshadowed by personal gain and everyone has to keep an eye out for backstabbing at all times; while carefully balancing her legal obligations to her parents and teachers with the extra-obligatory factors that will prevent them from discarding her before she's gotten everything she needs out of them, the young noble girl at the center of the story yearns for genuine affection and care such as she had once received from a nanny who was executed for crimes it had been convenient to her parents to frame her for when she was very young. At a social event, she is briefly distracted from checking various refreshments for poisons or mind-altering drugs by a handsome young nobleman with a charming smile, who over the course of the next in-universe weeks takes an interest in her without making clear any ulterior motives and slowly seducing her into trusting him. After she has fallen thoroughly into his clutches, he proceeds to betray her in the most viciously pragmatic way possible, stripping her of several opportunities she had spent years cultivating at the behest and payment of her rivals. A brief window into his perspective shows that he thinks of her as pathetic and almost hopelessly naive, but that there's a chance she'll take the event as the reality check it is and shape up into someone it would be dangerous to overlook and with a quite central grudge against him, so he's preparing to order some token security measures against her when, mid-sentence, his perspective cuts off.

A reframe back to the protagonist's viewpoint shows her as having picked up the pieces of her shattered psyche quite effectively, if not perhaps in what a normal person would call the usual fashion, and having decided that the extent to which she could blame him for doing exactly the same thing anyone else would have done to her given the chance is vastly overshadowed by how skilled he was at making her feel good and happy and adored when he was trying to do that. So she has decided to kidnap him and psychologically break him into doing what she wants again, using resources that she had continued hiding from him even while she trusted him out of sheer habit. The torture scenes, both physical and mental, are lovingly described, and the boy pretends to break several times before it actually happens, only to be caught out by clever tests the protagonist devises.

For the rest of the book, the protagonist's rise through the ranks of the kingdom is steady, even though she starts out lower than she would have if she had never fallen for the boy's original betrayal, and although her rivals initially deride her for spending so many resources on acquiring her pet, it turns out that having a consistent source of extremely basic emotional needs strengthens her considerably psychologically, giving her the edge she needs to triumph over several crucial rivals. At the end of the book she has acquired a position of direct service to the king, who is so impressed by her effectiveness in bending her pet's will to her own that he puts her in charge of breaking critically important dissidents.

 

...it's the sort of romance novel that Abrogail always thought she wanted to read, and Abrogail would have been much more excited about reading it before coming across the Earthtender masterpieces.  This is most well-crafted and Abrogail will be printing it throughout Cheliax and seeing if she can slip it into Taldor to corrupt their own sensibilities - it's very well-placed for that - but now it has the hollow sense of being given only exactly what you asked for, when you didn't understand what you really wanted.

Somebody, she guesses, put this directly after the Earthtender book exactly so that Abrogail would realize that all the romance novels she used to enjoy, even brought to the pinnacle of the art form she herself tried to create, would only be hollow things compared to what the wider universe could offer her?  And then she never gets an Earthtender book again, and has to read the two she has over and over again, or if they do send her other books they're not as good?  It's finely honed cruelty if so; especially the part where Abrogail herself wouldn't give back the Earthtender book for anything, even knowing that not even with the Crown of Infernal Majesty could she boost and force any Chelish writer to produce its equal, and may never again see its like.

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Maggieverse story about a noble girl who learns cynicism and cruelty

The maggieverse has heard hints from elsewhere about what Abrogail likes and would like to present the following:

A novel with "psychological horror" warnings on it but nonetheless genre-tagged for romance, about a girl who grows up in a monarchist, feudal-adjacent dystopia where personal relationships are overshadowed by personal gain and everyone has to keep an eye out for backstabbing at all times; while carefully balancing her legal obligations to her parents and teachers with the extra-obligatory factors that will prevent them from discarding her before she's gotten everything she needs out of them, the young noble girl at the center of the story yearns for genuine affection and care such as she had once received from a nanny who was executed for crimes it had been convenient to her parents to frame her for when she was very young. At a social event, she is briefly distracted from checking various refreshments for poisons or mind-altering drugs by a handsome young nobleman with a charming smile, who over the course of the next in-universe weeks takes an interest in her without making clear any ulterior motives and slowly seducing her into trusting him. After she has fallen thoroughly into his clutches, he proceeds to betray her in the most viciously pragmatic way possible, stripping her of several opportunities she had spent years cultivating at the behest and payment of her rivals. A brief window into his perspective shows that he thinks of her as pathetic and almost hopelessly naive, but that there's a chance she'll take the event as the reality check it is and shape up into someone it would be dangerous to overlook and with a quite central grudge against him, so he's preparing to order some token security measures against her when, mid-sentence, his perspective cuts off.

A reframe back to the protagonist's viewpoint shows her as having picked up the pieces of her shattered psyche quite effectively, if not perhaps in what a normal person would call the usual fashion, and having decided that the extent to which she could blame him for doing exactly the same thing anyone else would have done to her given the chance is vastly overshadowed by how skilled he was at making her feel good and happy and adored when he was trying to do that. So she has decided to kidnap him and psychologically break him into doing what she wants again, using resources that she had continued hiding from him even while she trusted him out of sheer habit. The torture scenes, both physical and mental, are lovingly described, and the boy pretends to break several times before it actually happens, only to be caught out by clever tests the protagonist devises.

For the rest of the book, the protagonist's rise through the ranks of the kingdom is steady, even though she starts out lower than she would have if she had never fallen for the boy's original betrayal, and although her rivals initially deride her for spending so many resources on acquiring her pet, it turns out that having a consistent source of extremely basic emotional needs strengthens her considerably psychologically, giving her the edge she needs to triumph over several crucial rivals. At the end of the book she has acquired a position of direct service to the king, who is so impressed by her effectiveness in bending her pet's will to her own that he puts her in charge of breaking critically important dissidents.

 

...it's the sort of romance novel that Abrogail always thought she wanted to read, and Abrogail would have been much more excited about reading it before coming across the Earthtender masterpieces.  This is most well-crafted and Abrogail will be printing it throughout Cheliax and seeing if she can slip it into Taldor to corrupt their own sensibilities - it's very well-placed for that - but now it has the hollow sense of being given only exactly what you asked for, when you didn't understand what you really wanted.

Somebody, she guesses, put this directly after the Earthtender book exactly so that Abrogail would realize that all the romance novels she used to enjoy, even brought to the pinnacle of the art form she herself tried to create, would only be hollow things compared to what the wider universe could offer her?  And then she never gets an Earthtender book again, and has to read the two she has over and over again, or if they do send her other books they're not as good?  It's finely honed cruelty if so.  Especially the part where Abrogail herself wouldn't give back the Earthtender book for anything; even knowing that not with the Crown of Infernal Majesty could she boost any Chelish writer to produce its equal, and may never again see its like.