it is a beautiful day in Cheliax and you are a horrible medianworld romance novel

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Content	Abrogail Thrune II to-reign-in-Cheliax Iarwain @Plastic Heart / Planet Rockeye: Oh, yes, this new novel is definitely much better! Keeping the part about the island being invaded is fine; it just has to be set up in a way where it makes it clear that it results from the protagonist's many careless mistakes rather than being some inevitable quality of the world. The therapy sections at the end can be deleted without trouble - or just rewritten in a more Asmodean way, which makes it clearer that the people getting this involuntary "therapy" have simply changed from one owner to another; and that the question is not whether the little people of the world will be owned, but whether it is you doing the owning or somebody else's government. If there's any way to pay for the creation of new books interdimensionally, Abrogail would happily pay 1000gp to fund production of a romance novel with a proper Asmodean plotline (now that they have some idea of what that is) but with the sort of technical details that don't usually go into romance novels!
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Content	Abrogail Thrune II to-reign-in-Cheliax Iarwain Plastic Heart / Planet Rockeye's charismatic cult leader After conferring with some others how's this horror book about a charismatic cult leader who uses gaslighting and blackmail and conditioning to build himself a harem, take control of a major company, buy an island, and effectively become a tiny King until it starts falling down when people get too suspicious? There's a lot of attention paid to the details of psychology and how to keep intricate lies believable and consistent. But the psychology is weird and the lies are actually not especially skilled, these people seem kind of deeply suspicious and good at picking them apart so the lies are arranged at a different angle than Cheliax would use to lie, lots of arranging background facts and faking books and records. She can probably just skip the part where the island is invaded and he gets caught and executed and everyone gets therapy, since that's her taste in books. Oh, yes, this new novel is definitely much better! Keeping the part about the island being invaded is fine; it just has to be set up in a way where it makes it clear that it results from the protagonist's many careless mistakes rather than being some inevitable quality of the world. The therapy sections at the end can be deleted without trouble - or just rewritten in a more Asmodean way, which makes it clearer that the people getting this involuntary "therapy" have simply changed from one owner to another; and that the question is not whether the little people of the world will be owned, but whether it is you doing the owning or somebody else's government. If there's any way to pay for the creation of new books interdimensionally, Abrogail would happily pay 1000gp to fund production of a romance novel with a proper Asmodean plotline (now that they have some idea of what that is) but with the sort of technical details that don't usually go into romance novels!
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Content	Abrogail Thrune II to-reign-in-Cheliax Iarwain Plastic Heart / Planet Rockeye's charismatic cult leader After conferring with some others how's this horror book about a charismatic cult leader who uses gaslighting and blackmail and conditioning to build himself a harem, take control of a major company, buy an island, and effectively become a tiny King until it starts falling down when people get too suspicious? There's a lot of attention paid to the details of psychology and how to keep intricate lies believable and consistent. But the psychology is weird and the lies are actually not especially skilled, these people seem kind of deeply suspicious and good at picking them apart so the lies are arranged at a different angle than Cheliax would use to lie, lots of arranging background facts and faking books and records. She can probably just skip the part where the island is invaded and he gets caught and executed and everyone gets therapy, since that's her taste in books. Oh, yes, this new novel is definitely much better! Keeping the part about the island being invaded is fine; it just has to be set up in a way where the King's downfall clearly results from the protagonist's many careless mistakes, rather than being some inevitable quality of the world. The therapy sections at the end can be deleted without trouble - or just rewritten in a more Asmodean way, which makes it clearer that the people getting this involuntary "therapy" have simply changed from one owner to another; and that the question is not whether the little people of the world will be owned, but whether it is you doing the owning or somebody else's government. If there's any way to pay for the creation of new books interdimensionally, Abrogail would happily pay 1000gp to fund production of a romance novel with a proper Asmodean plotline (now that they have some idea of what that is) but with the sort of technical details that don't usually go into romance novels!
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Content	Abrogail Thrune II to-reign-in-Cheliax Iarwain Plastic Heart / Planet Rockeye's charismatic cult leader After conferring with some others how's this horror book about a charismatic cult leader who uses gaslighting and blackmail and conditioning to build himself a harem, take control of a major company, buy an island, and effectively become a tiny King until it starts falling down when people get too suspicious? There's a lot of attention paid to the details of psychology and how to keep intricate lies believable and consistent. But the psychology is weird and the lies are actually not especially skilled, these people seem kind of deeply suspicious and good at picking them apart so the lies are arranged at a different angle than Cheliax would use to lie, lots of arranging background facts and faking books and records. She can probably just skip the part where the island is invaded and he gets caught and executed and everyone gets therapy, since that's her taste in books. Oh, yes, this new novel is definitely much better! Keeping the part about the island being invaded is fine; it just has to be set up in a way where the King's downfall clearly results from the protagonist's many careless mistakes, rather than being some inevitable quality of the world. The therapy sections at the end can be deleted without trouble - or just rewritten in a more Asmodean way, which makes it clearer that the people getting this involuntary "therapy" have simply changed from one owner to another; and that the question is not whether the little people of the world will be owned, but whether it is you doing the owning or somebody else's government. If there's any way to pay for the creation of new books interdimensionally, Abrogail would happily pay 1000gp to fund production of a romance novel with a proper Asmodean plotline (now that they have some idea of what that is) but with the sort of technical details that don't usually go into romance novels!